the greatest pain in life is not to die but to be ignored--- to lose the person u love so much to another who does not care at all---- to have some one u care so much about throw a party and not tell u about it.
when ur favorite person on earth neglects to invite u to his graduation----to have people think that u dont care
the greatest pain in life is not to die----but to be forgotten---to be left in dust after another’s great achievement to never get a call from a friend, just saying “Hi”----when u show some one ur innermost thoughts and they laugh in ur face---for friends to always be to busy to console u when u need someone to lift ur spirits-----when it seems like the only person who cares about u, is ur own.
life is full of pain but does it ever get better?-----will people ever care about each other---and make time for those who r in need?----each of us has a part to play in this great show we call life----each of us has a duty to mankind to tell our friends we love them----If u do not care about ur friends u will not be punished----u will simply be ignored, forgotten as u have done to others----by UMER BAJWA
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NejinOniwa
- 2007-01-25 @ 03:15:31 am
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Seems you put some spirit in this one, nii-san. Still though, some things are slightly...off in this one.
Some tips.
1: When writing deep stuff, use correct SPELLING and GRAMMAR or readers are likely to gouge their eyes out with a spork.
2: What happened to the word structure, i wonder?
3: Death is not the end of life. Death is when nobody remembers you, when your very existence - or lack of it - is lost in the hands of the careless humanity's minds.
Not trying to give a "You suck!" or "Oh Horatio, where art thou?" impression here...but please - Deep poetry does NOT go together with slang. That combination equals Sporking Your Eyes Out. Wakatta?
//Nei